Post your own lyrics

Thanks man, I'll take those into consideration.

I'm not very good at "writing" so to say, but I felt like I had a strong idea in my head and I needed to get it down.

But cheers for the feedback! :)
 
Cynosure (lyrics)

Brilliance is never understood
Underplayed by the masses
Getting filled like greenwood

At the center of attention
Not a single moment
Of silence and dissension

That was the day he died…

How can you be so sure?
If you judge by appearance only
How will you ever know?

How can you be so sure?
The mind isn’t all
Is it because of cynosure?
Cynosure

Travel to the North Star
They will surely follow
You can’t even go far

Sadness fills their eyes
The man is gone
But brilliance never dies

But do they really care?

How can you be so sure?
If you judge by appearance only
How will you ever know?

How can you be so sure?
The mind isn’t all
Is it because of cynosure?
Cynosure

A quick one, to get back into the swing of things.
 
Dusty, you're on your way to becoming a really good lyricist. Shows what working on your craft every day can do. I'm glad you weren't discouraged by people making fun of your early lyrics.
 
Mystery With A Twistery (lyrics)

There’s been a murder in Grimsley House
Of a fair, caring girl named Claire
She was found dead in her blouse
Alone, the culprit was nowhere

“Sir, do you think it was Mickey Al Bob?”
“No, I think he’s too much of a slob”
That day no progress was made
And the killer was still in the shade

Destruction of property, the rage and grief
The poor girl’s parents were crying their lungs out
Wait for an opening in their shield, a moment so brief
And he will strike once again, and you won’t have time to shout

“Trying to run away from the castle, Meg?”
“I’m so afraid, sir, can I leave, oh, I beg”
That day no progress was made
And the killer was still in the shade

Mystery with a twistery
The killer is among us
Mystery with a twistery
Everyone’s becoming a gloomy gus

This is indeed a story of death
So don’t worry, just hold your breath
Maybe you won’t die a violent death
At the hands of me, you don’t know who I am

Gathered for the final supper
It all was silent, no one said a word
They were all in the scupper
The lights went out, and a scream was heard

“Another one dead, this time it’s dear old Ted”
“Maybe it’s John, he’s filled with dread”
That day no progress was made
And the killer was still in the shade

And so the story moves on
Jim was standing in the kitchen
Not all hope was gone
But this was the trichion

“That’s it, now Eric is down”
“You’re the killer?!” Alice said with a frown
That day no progress was made
And the killer was still in the shade

Mystery with a twistery
The killer is now known
Mystery with a twistery
But the cover wasn’t blown

Life or death, the flip of a coin
Who will be next, the next to join
The rising list of victims
One of these turns, I think it’s you!

Three days later, only three were left
They were fighting over the key
The key to the car, and one would get the shaft
The only one to escape, see?

And so, only two were left
The killer took out his knife
And took the other’s life
That was the end of it all

Our story ends in mystery
Who was the killer in the end?
Maybe we will know someday
Grimsley House is now all alone

And that’s that!

So, this is probably a lot weaker than the last one. I was trying really hard not to make this a clone of Robbery, Assault & Battery or The Battle Of Epping Forest. Unfortunately, I don’t think I succeeded.

That’s why I wanna hear your thoughts on it so I can make it better. I hope it's not THAT bad...
 
Blank (lyrics)

Can you see my state of mind?
Do you know if it’s really blank?
To keep anything I’ll find
I would do that until it sank

Do you know what it’s like?
To not understand what life really is
For me, that’s another strike
Unlike the others, I’m not a whiz

They’ll stop and laugh
And I don't know why
A mistake on my behalf
Hey, maybe I should still try

If it is truly as it seems
Will that make me happy or sad?
I can see nothing in my dreams
I don’t know if that’s bad

Living without a clue
Doesn’t seem like the best use of my time
But I don’t know how to change myself
When I think, my mind always goes blank

I could go on about my troubles
But there’s a chance you might get bored
It all fizzes and pops and bubbles
Someday, they’ll play another chord

So, can you see my state of mind?
Do you know if it’s really blank?
To keep anything I’ll find
I would do that until it sank

But what do I really know?

A Yellow One (lyrics)

This was the start of a brand new day
Time to pack the bags and head out
Out to catch a plane; as to say
Lack of anything was never in doubt

Once a time, the world would treat him bad
They would laugh and scoff, ain’t that sad
But his luck would change in the middle of the night
They said he needed the money, they said it was right

One may wonder
If the man is truly happy
With everything at his hand
Isn’t he a yellow one?

They would fall for him
Until he would let them go
He would change it on a whim
And no one ever told him no

Really, who could have cared
A man with perfection at his side
No one could be compared
And he took that in stride

One may wonder
If the man is truly happy
With everything at his hand
Isn’t he a yellow one?

Yeah, isn’t he a yellow one?
Ooh, isn’t he a yellow one?

One may wonder
If the man is truly happy
With everything at his hand
Isn’t he a yellow one?

Well, isn’t he a yellow one?
Honestly, isn’t he a yellow one?

A yellow one, yeah...

A double post!
 
METAL NATION


I belong to a club of rock n roll
There are no fees; there is no toll
We wear our bands spread across our chest
You’ll never catch us in a jacket and vest

We are spread throughout the Earth
In our old blue jeans and our black t-shirts
We don’t need cleansing; no sanitation
Cuz we are part of the Metal Nation

Crank some Priest and Megadeth
Crank Anthrax and crank Opeth
Pound your fists; get up and sing
Somewhere someone’s doing the same thing
Have a few drinks; get real stoned
Cuz in Metal Nation you’re never alone


We’re told to grow up and do it fast
And we may be viewed as outcasts
But we’re not afraid; we are shameless
And we judge the judgers for their lameness

We are spread throughout the Earth
Ready to rock since our very birth
So don’t come trying to save our souls
Cuz in Metal Nation it’s about rock n roll

Crank some Slayer and Megadeth
Crank the Sabbath and crank Opeth
Pound your fists get up and sing
Somewhere someone’s doing the same thing
Have a few drinks get real stoned
Cuz in Metal Nation you’re never alone

Power, prog, death, stoner or doom
Just as long as it shakes this fucking room
Turn it up loud and act like a fool
From the very new to the very old-school
We are spread throughout the Earth
Our music collection is what we’re worth
It’s all we have; it’s what we save
So burry it with us in our graves

Crank some Metallica when they were faster
So don’t play anything after Master
Pound your fists get up and sing
Somewhere someone’s doing the same thing
Have a few drinks get real stoned
Cuz in Metal Nation you’re never alone
 
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Shitting Buddies


I’m sitting in the stall
Reading my phone
Enjoying the peace
I’m glad I’m all alone
That’s when the door
In the stall next to me
Is opened by a person
Who’s not here to pee

I can see a belt
I can see a pair of shoes
I don’t memorize feet
So I don’t know who’s
I hear the person grunt
I hear him breathe
It’s time for me to finish up
It’s time for me to leave


We’re shitting buddies, shitting buddies
Side by Side
Shitting buddies, shitting buddies
Time to swallow my pride
I’ll smell yours and you smell mine
Shitting buddies Shitting buddies
It happens every time

I take my hands
And plug each ear
I don’t wanna know
I don’t wanna hear
I wish I had a third hand
To help with my woes
So I could stop smelling
By holding my nose

We’re shitting buddies, shitting buddies
Side by Side
Shitting buddies, shitting buddies
Time to swallow my pride
I’ll smell yours and you smell mine
Shitting buddies, shitting buddies
It happens every time
 
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Jamie Laszlo said:
Time to swallow my pride
I’ll smell yours and you smell mine
Shitting buddies Shitting buddies
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Unlimited Rice Pudding (lyrics)

When you know they want too much
Whatever can you do?
For just a small prize, as such
You can have a cake and so…

Well, how do you know that?
There’s no single answer
Can you taste the truth?
Or can you only batter the lies?

You’ll know they’ll want too much
After the unlimited rice pudding is done

When you know they just hate it
Whatever can you do?
Pay the bill and take a seat
Enjoy your pie and so…

The house is not gonna get any better
So why do you still try?
The wallet is not gonna get bigger
So why do you still want more?

You’ll know they’ll want too much
After the unlimited rice pudding is done

So, how can you do that?
There’s no second answer
Can you see what’s good or bad?
Or are you just left blind as a bat?

How much do you eat?
Is it too much?
How much freedom do you need?
Is it too much?

Well, the truth is in sight
Somewhere in the night
You will need good insight
You need to enter the light
You gotta join the fight
You can’t have a slight…

...misunderstanding

You’ll know they’ll want too much
After the unlimited rice pudding is done

More cheese on the patty
You can’t have enough
That thing looks nice
Let’s have a bunch

Do you really know how much you want?
Really now, can you decide?
Do you really wanna stop or still go?

If your answer is yes
Dreams are achievable
If your answer is no
Maybe you can ask for a better deal

There’s no thing as fully satisfied
According to my fellow pals
So, what does that mean?
No social status indeed…

You’ll know they’ll want too much (want too much)
After the unlimited rice pudding is done

Yeah!

You’ll know they’ll want too much (want too much)
After the unlimited rice pudding is done

You still want more...can’t get enough
Still want more...can’t get enough

A spoonful too much
Tell me in the end
Who got the last laugh?

After the unlimited rice pudding is done...

Some of my most weird lyrics ever. You can probably guess what it is about.
 
Buonanotte (lyrics)

As we lay here in the mist
In the shadow of the night
Still, we feel released
That’s when we say goodbye

Buonanotte, everyone…

They put a bullet in his brain
And he cried red tears
Left all alone in the rain
To live in fear

Good night...

She got hit by a train
And she’s not okay
She might have been slightly insane
But she really didn’t have anything to say

Good night...

Death by glamour, they said
The dryer blew up in their face
And when they found her, she was dead
Just another one for the rat race

Good night…

Is death considered art, he asked
Well, maybe if you try
But you don’t know how long you’ll last
Your own thoughts might make you cry

Good night…

I’m lying here in my hospital bed
Just waiting for the flash to come
I can see my cheeks have gone red
What can I do, the damage is done
I wish I could stay for one more day
But this is my station
For all my sins, I need to pay
And I’m heading out to my final destination

As we lay here in the mist
In the shadow of the night
Still, we feel released
That’s when we say goodbye

As we lay here in the mist
In the shadow of the night
Still, we feel released
That’s when we say goodbye

Buonanotte, everyone…

Don't worry, people, more Cynosure-style lyrics are coming.
 
Stardust said:
Is death considered art, he asked
Well, maybe if you try
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I like this. A lot of possible meanings come to mind, some more gruesome than others...

I think you have a good premise with this one. I would try to develop the characters (the man with the bullet, girl with the train etc.) further. Add more detail, try to make each verse memorable.
 
Jamie Laszlo said:
METAL NATION


I belong to a club of rock n roll
There are no fees; there is no toll
We wear our bands spread across our chest
You’ll never catch us in a jacket and vest

We are spread throughout the Earth
In our old blue jeans and our black t-shirts
We don’t need cleansing; no sanitation
Cuz we are part of the Metal Nation

Crank some Priest and Megadeth
Crank Anthrax and crank Opeth
Pound your fists; get up and sing
Somewhere someone’s doing the same thing
Have a few drinks; get real stoned
Cuz in Metal Nation you’re never alone


We’re told to grow up and do it fast
And we may be viewed as outcasts
But we’re not afraid; we are shameless
And we judge the judgers for their lameness

We are spread throughout the Earth
Ready to rock since our very birth
So don’t come trying to save our souls
Cuz in Metal Nation it’s about rock n roll

Crank some Slayer and Megadeth
Crank the Sabbath and crank Opeth
Pound your fists get up and sing
Somewhere someone’s doing the same thing
Have a few drinks get real stoned
Cuz in Metal Nation you’re never alone

Power, prog, death, stoner or doom
Just as long as it shakes this fucking room
Turn it up loud and act like a fool
From the very new to the very old-school
We are spread throughout the Earth
Our music collection is what we’re worth
It’s all we have; it’s what we save
So burry it with us in our graves

Crank some Metallica when they were faster
So don’t play anything after Master
Pound your fists get up and sing
Somewhere someone’s doing the same thing
Have a few drinks get real stoned
Cuz in Metal Nation you’re never alone
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What style of music do you reckon fits these lyrics best? Sabaton? Manowar? Something completely different?
 
The references to different Metal bands make me think of Sabaton. Sounds like a parody such as Metal Machine and Metal Ripper.
 
The Factorious Mecanus (lyrics)

I. Earthshock

Good evening
Close the door behind you
Cover the chrome darkness
Lingering in the silver sky

Reality has been shattered
Virtual insanity has been realized
Death to all nature
Synthesized by the future

Fantasy and imagination
What does it mean anymore?
There exists no clever sensation
Forced to think until their brains turn sore

Featureless minds can be revived
There is no clear ruler here
Only victors of an fight may stay alive
The advent of chaos upon us now

I have delved into the past
The time window flashes
Any breath could be my last
My aneurysm dashes
Any hope of longer survival

My memory surges with pain and suffering...

Picture imperfect, the great unknown
The ark in space, the mystic rhythms
The last of the starmakers is dead

The realms of impossibility always cross my mind
My imagination may be the only thing I have left

For the earthshock of the world
Immortality has turned us mad
Hungry for the continuation of life
And the universe is cracking at the seams

But where did we go wrong?
Was there any hope of preventing
The factorious mecanus?

II. Insomnia

I have gone so long
I can’t sleep no more
I’m lost awake
With no means of escape

In the end, what does it matter?
I’m living in a nightmare, still
How do you escape from reality?
When do you find how to kill
Time

The perfect caricature
Of rage and grace
I’ve lived it all
Without turning face to the light

I wish I could dream again
All those haunting nightmares
Of joy, happiness and love
I wish I could forget that too
And I once had…

III. Nonplussed

Another pull of the trigger
Waiting for the red rain
I can’t forget the crying
A row of short breaths

And then they stopped...

Stuck in bewilderment
Murder was my given solution
The consequences
Didn’t even faze me

But now that I am old
I remember what I was told
That life was to be loved
And not to be taken away early

The guilty gear kept turning
In my head
My heart was burning
In my life

What had I done?
I couldn’t turn back the hands of fate
They dictated the end of me

I have gone outside now
The sunshine burns my skin
Gotta get used to it again
As I wipe the sweat off my brow

That was the last one…

IV. Listen

You will listen now
The walls have broken down
And they will go
We will escape this town

The universal mind
Shall rule once more
We shall be free in kind
To start the virtual war

Deep breath, inferno
The green death
Antimatter, the exploding implosion

The impossible planet will be restored…
SO, YOU WILL LISTEN TO ME!

I demand you to listen now
Get out of the shadows
Break your illusions
Of mechanical madness

The universal mind
Shall rule once more
We shall be free in kind
To start the virtual war

Robots of death, time for a change
They won’t blow your mind
The daybreaker will return

The impossible planet will be restored...
SO, YOU WILL LISTEN TO ME!

Just listen to me, it’s all I’ve got left
My hopes and dreams sunk in the sea
With the lingering will of silence, I can’t adapt

V. Mind Over Matter

I can see the horror in their eyes
Our first wave just dropped like flies
Technical difficulties is not real so far
Shooting high in the sky, a star

In the heavens above
A lone bird soars
It is the power of love

It’s quickly shot down, killed
A change of seasons prevented
Its fate will be lamented
But not right now

In the midst of a dream
His eyes gleam
My father’s face before me
He says; “Son, just let it be”

Don’t you see what’s happening?
A hopeless war for a hopeless cause
The struggle within is meaningless
It’s better just to give up the fight

Do I agree or disagree?
Will I follow or go my own way?
Should I stop the factorious mecanus?
Or should I just let it go?

I close my eyes and I think of my fate
Every memory rolling around in my head
I should hurry, better get it straight
The diverging paths are ahead

Death is just around the corner…

I can just now feel her embrace
Her smile gives me the truth
My mother’s wisdom will race
My mind over matter and return my youth

Just the final strike to go…

VI. Journey’s End

It’s the end...

The age of steel stops here
Heading towards to the tower
The soldiers cower in fear
Where the sweet turns to sour

We’ve opened Pandora’s Box
The pandemonium has appeared
Dearly beloved, yours truly, the equinox
It has arrived and it has interfered

I’ve been running all of my life
I’ve been wasting my time
I will go and I shall not return

“Live by your secrets, they are just divine...”

Everything has its time and everything dies
I’ll remove the last obstacle and then I’m dead
Nevertheless, a nightmare in silver awaits

“Live by your secrets, but make sure to hide…”

I will bring the flash, the flash of the brightest light
To end all life, to stop the living lie
I shall destroy this earth and bring it to peace

“Live by your secrets, imagine what you’ll find…”

Now I’ve realized
The ark in space can’t save you now
But the nightmare ends with the night
The nightmare ends with the night

Enter the depths of hell
Just break the spell
And there you go

The factorious mecanus
Is all but gone
Now they will remember
The joy, the love, their hopes

But I am lost, just trapped in time
Sacrificing everything just to be there…

“Welcome home, son. We are so proud of you”.
With that, this song will end
The book will close, but our hearts
Our hearts will last forever, from here to infinity...
…but the story never ends…

Oh, look at that. It might be seriously flawed in some places, I think but I'm pretty proud of this lengthy thing.
 
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