Post your own lyrics

Discussion in 'Musicians Discussion' started by Night Prowler, Mar 10, 2014.

  1. Diesel 11

    Diesel 11 As you scream into the web of silence...

    I get what you're saying completely. I've often looked into learning more about actually writing music but haven't had any real opportunities for it yet, but I have been looking for something to make learning it easier. I do write a lot of stories and poetry, though, but some concepts just don't seem to lend themselves well for me. I have managed to scrape a band together though - we all had similar tastes and each had something to bring to the table so we decided to see if we could actually write some stuff together. We have been working on ideas and we've been doing decently thus far but have no actual recordings yet. Welcome to Your Home was just something I felt like writing by myself at the time, mainly to practice lyricism and get some stuff out of my system and possibly have something for the future.

    But yeah, I get what you're saying and @Perun I've read far harsher things that were less beneficial. So thanks for the suggestions, it means a lot, really.
     
  2. Mosh

    Mosh The years just pass like trains Staff Member

    I broadly agree with what Per is saying but I do want to add that writing lyrics first in itself isn’t a bad thing. But I think it makes sense to discuss the initial idea with the musicians involved first. Of course you can’t drop a whole album on them and expect them to write music to it.

    I also second LC’s suggestion to learn music. The passion for music is already there, learning the mechanics behind it and being able to create music of your own would be a huge benefit.
     
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  3. Diesel 11

    Diesel 11 As you scream into the web of silence...

    Yeah, that's the last thing I'd wanna do. I did send it but just to get some feedback on the lyrics themselves.

    Makes sense, I'll see if I can figure it out.
     
  4. The Flash

    The Flash Dennis Wilcock did 9/11

    This, to me, is only true if you already have a sense for putting music and lyrics together.

    Also in many cases that strategy results in the lyrics being too wordy for the music.
     
  5. Diesel 11

    Diesel 11 As you scream into the web of silence...

    Which is why I always try to sing through the lyrics I come up with, which helps the editing process (and helps me practice my voice).
     
  6. Diesel 11

    Diesel 11 As you scream into the web of silence...

    So I this started out as lyrics for a hypothetical song and kinda turned into a poem? I'm trying to come up with a melody for it, nonetheless. It’s kinda random and slips in and out of rhymes, but it’s supposed to be about heretics.

    “The Crucible”
    The crucible of man
    The sin twast ripped in stone
    Whilst flesh lay burnt and bleeding
    The hollow truth begun
    The eyes of Ra lie open
    And Veritas speaks in lies
    While pain was forged in furnaces
    Of the ancient’s holy grails

    Burning along the shorelines
    Cast down upon the rocks
    The sirens beckon yonder
    To destroy the star-strucks
    A filament of wisdom
    Punctured in seven spots
    I have no mortal compass
    For it is riddled with my rot

    A forge of burning hate
    The fiery abyss below
    My hands behold my fate
    On the path that I shall go
    The right is left beside me
    The truth is oft not plain
    Begone ye vile beggar
    Gnashing at his chain

    Inferno waits for many
    While Satan’s in his lair
    Holding his hands a-plenty
    For all those who’d had a care
    And crippled, broken, forgotten mess
    The archangel blasts his horn
    And down to Hell we fall away
    Forever and ever amen

    For as we live and as we breathe
    All life burns as one
    Impaled bird upon the ground
    The stake right through its chest
    And demonic temples raised at night
    To silence the tomb of Jesus Christ
    Holds me down on the altar’s wings
    And cast me now into the fires

    A flaming chariot, a chirruping choir
    And all hear the hales above
    Wouldst wash these cursed hands clean
    For the murder’s out of love
    And all these wretched, puking souls
    Shaking still through the fire
    Lead me past the wicker man
    Onwards to the funeral pyre

    And oh! The sounds, the longing cry
    The soul departs without a sigh
    Into the yonder blackened wood
    Underneath the solemn hood
    But can I turn a cursed ear
    Away from each piece of shrouded shrub
    And will I wake to see the light
    Or is my time now up above?

    All this, too, shall come to pass
    The vehicle of slaughter tramples the ground
    Beating harder through the veins
    Of those who lived to seek the truth
    For though I try to comprehend
    I shall not dare to speak or cry
    For the Crucible of man was forged
    In desire, guilt, and a wish to die.
     
  7. Collin

    Collin Tool Aficionado

    Where's the chorus?
    Where's the chorus?
    Where's the chorus?
    Where's the chorus?
     
  8. Diesel 11

    Diesel 11 As you scream into the web of silence...

    There is no chorus!
    There is no chorus!
    There is no chorus!
    There is no chorus!
     
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  9. Diesel 11

    Diesel 11 As you scream into the web of silence...

    Here, I wrote some lyrics with a chorus just for you:

    "Inside the Abyss"

    [Verse]
    The soul is crying out in pain
    We've seen the actions, we know the name
    The spread of rot through the core
    It shan't stop, nevermore
    Souls were crying out in pain
    Taking from the eternal plain
    An afterlife is all and nothing more
    And yet they try to seal the score

    [Pre-Chorus]
    Did you ever think about the consequence?
    The only die cast left at their expense
    From immortal wisdom to dying refrain
    The path, the journey, it's all come back again

    [Chorus]
    Open the door, can you feel the wild winds blow?
    Sailing the shore of where you used to go
    Inside the abyss the fires are burning still
    And the human heart is ripe for the kill

    [Verse]
    Leviathan lets it rip
    A fatal blow on a sinking ship
    I look about and all I see
    No hand of god guiding me
    The execution fields of grain
    The endless fight and the endless pain
    Did you know the exit light
    Is burning still, is burning bright

    [Pre-Chorus]
    He who fights with monsters should see to it
    That he does not become one, consigned to fit
    And if you stare long into the abyss
    It will stare back, a deathly kiss

    [Chorus]
    Open the door, can you feel the wild winds blow?
    Sailing the shore of where you used to go
    Inside the abyss the fires are burning still
    And the human heart is ripe for the kill

    [Bridge]
    "The solar winds of hell are blowing and I'm
    Lost without cause
    My left side is plunged with the dagger and
    There shall be no pause
    What I believed and what I dreamed, it's all
    Gone rotting away
    And now my left is drifting about and I won't
    See a new day."

    [Pre-Chorus]
    What makes a man do what he does?
    Can any of us know or find out what was?
    Is there any answer to the mystery?
    Is God above controlling it all or Hellfire misery?

    [Chorus]
    Open the door, can you feel the wild winds blow?
    Sailing the shore of where you used to go
    Inside the abyss the fires are burning still
    And the human heart is ripe for the kill

    [Chorus]
    Inside the abyss the fires are burning still
    And the human heart is ripe for the kill
    Look but don't touch, it spreads like disease
    And no one knows what someone else sees

    [Outro]
    Sailing along the shore where they left the spoils and the kills
    And inside the abyss the fires are burning still...
     
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  10. Collin

    Collin Tool Aficionado

    How thoughtful!
     
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  11. Stardust

    Stardust A Blue Sector Mirage

    Putting Pressure Onto Me (lyrics)

    He sleeps softly in his bed
    Between the midst of beyond
    Evidently misunderstood
    Relapse unfolded

    Sitting on the edge of a mountain
    The wind ever slightly pushes him
    As the cool water flows beneath

    Putting pressure onto me
    Listening cherishable fate
    Distant shadows form
    To create a bigger whole

    She’s standing there on his doorstep
    But he can’t help but notice her smile
    Carries the most of autumn’s rain

    “Still my heart clings to him…”

    He watches the mist go by
    She lets it clothe her mind
    Rest assured hope remains

    “While the night remains the same…”

    Putting pressure onto me
    Listening cherishable fate
    Distant shadows form
    To create a bigger whole

    Blossoming in the disappearing world
    Flying in a cloudy sky

    Unite the two the relinquished shooting stars
    Questions not a burden to them now

    Putting pressure onto me
    Listening cherishable fate
    Distant shadows form
    To create a bigger whole

    Putting pressure onto me
    Justifying the means
    Sun is shining
    And the flowers bloom today
     

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