Too many "ear" sounds at the end of the first verse. Lose at least one "year". Try an ABAB rhyme scheme. Change line 3 to rhyme with "care". Change line 9 to rhyme with "survive". ("Alive" is an obvious suggestion there.) I'd go ABAB on the 3rd verse too. "Edge" may be tough to rhyme in this context, so go for that challenge, and find something better than "fed". You're forcing yourself to drop the word "on" which makes sense of that line for a pedestrian rhyme. You don't "claw it all back" in a single moment. "Claw" suggests a long, hard struggle. Go for a verb that can happen in a moment (eg "take it all back"), or change the penultimate line to a longer timeframe. No offense intended if you think I'm being hard. But these would by my thoughts if it was my draft.